Petting the wildness
November 29, 2007 at 9:35 pm | In "Fifty Five Words ", poésie | 15 CommentsHis eyes went deep red,
And voice raised to top,
As though a dragon was woken up,
As though a silent snake was rattled,
Inner animal getting exposed.
Rarity was turning into common.
He needed couple of deep breaths,
Calmness to clear his mind.
Can he do it?
he doubted.
Patience can pet any wildness.
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The prompt today over at “Totally optional prompts” was animals, since I am not so good with pets, nor a huge fan of animals, I just thought on the lines I could. so here it is.
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Patience can pet any wilderness, now there’s a thought!
Comment by SweetTalkingGuy — November 29, 2007 #
“a dragon woken up…” it does take patience to ride dragons… 55 words of pure energy, all doubts put aside…
Comment by Lea — November 29, 2007 #
That is some thought!
Comment by gautami — November 29, 2007 #
excellent.. i was thinking abut expounding on my “manimal” theory,,, and going with something human like this… you did it very well.. i loved it……
Comment by paisley — November 30, 2007 #
So clever! Great line: As though a silent snake was rattled
Comment by Tumblewords — November 30, 2007 #
I like the line, “as though a silent snake was rattled.” – A good play with words.
Comment by Pauline — November 30, 2007 #
wow rambler this is excellent with a clever conclusion. patience can pet any wildness.
Comment by marja — November 30, 2007 #
***Patience can pet any wildness
I tot that was a splendid and thought provoking line
Great stuff.
Comment by SweetstickyChewy — November 30, 2007 #
That was a powerful poem!!! i think if i had to write on animals, i would have gone into animals within us…but not in poetry
you do that well indeed!!!
Comment by Thinking aloud — November 30, 2007 #
Once again,I am impressed by the way you have taken the hint along a totally different track,yet keeping the theme in mind
Comment by Sameera — November 30, 2007 #
I like the tightness of these lines. The economy of words mimics the attempt at self-control. Poetry at its best!
Comment by Linda Jacobs — December 1, 2007 #
Hey! this was just fantastic. I love all the word play in this piece. But the idea of snakes being rattled was my favorite. Very clever writing.
Comment by dennis — December 1, 2007 #
Beautiful….
Comment by Saumya — December 17, 2007 #
Comment by priyaiyer — December 17, 2007 #
i think i saw saumya’s comment in the recent comments box and started reading the post. liked it!
Comment by priyaiyer — December 18, 2007 #