A drink in their hands,
Smiles on their face,
A candle to soothe,
And a lovely conversation too .
Outrageous they were termed,
A single mom, she belonged to nineties
A tired teacher, he was of sixties
They shared something beautiful,
Battered bodies, shattered souls.
The bridge they began constructing
Was never meant for completion.
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I am just back from a vacation, and for a change am in a real good mood, I struggled to write something on outrageous but I was in too much of a positive frame of mind to think about outrageous, then I began thinking about completion and kind of struggled with that too. Hopefully this makes some sense
anthonynorth said
Sometimes we just need someone. An excellent poem.
texasblu said
Oh no – this makes perfect sense! Not everything SHOULD be completed!
Enjoyed it very much! Aren’t vacations wonderful?
priyaiyer said
its beautiful.
and it does make a lot of sense. a lot of what the society terms ‘outrageous’ can be beautiful, if taken in the right sense.
Medhini said
I had the same difficulty that you talked about the word ‘outrageous’. The word seemed outraged. Nice poem.
Nidhi said
wow! it is lovely post. the bridge they began constructing, was never meant for completion……..I love these lines. I am inagining how simply and beautifully you have captured all the emotions. I like it.
Bless You. ~Namaste~
Autumn said
I hope you had a great time! Sounds like you deserved a vacation.
That was a very lovely poem. Once again, you provide an image very well.
Tammy said
I think you used both words wonderfully. I fully understood that last line. Well done and welcome home!
paisley said
a may. december romance… i don’t see how those young people do it… i am 46 and men my age gross me out… i cannot imagine being with an older man… or vise versa….
veggiesyarnsandtails said
Indeed it does make sense Rambler. Beautifully captured.
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Thinking aloud - Suma said
loks like teh br8’s done u good…
the last line…is nicely written…
DreamCatcher said
plz stay in this frame of mind if it prompts this creation. bravo!
Shubd said
Hi there
Hope you enjoyed ur vacation
I liked ur take on “completion” . especially the positive aspect.
you know what .. I would hv liked a happier ending ..
“The bridge they began constructing
Was never meant for completion.”
Isnt everyone entitled to happiness ..? ..may be the bridge should be completed ..
Thanks for your comments on the blog .
Tumblewords said
Nice post! Glad you had a rewarding vacation!! That’s the best kind!
Veens said
ohh thats nice!!!!!
somethings r never to be completed!
Jane Doe said
This is a wonderful piece, I especially liked the way you ended it. Great writing!
bluebutterfly said
thats the effect a nice vacation has … wow .. i need one …
but great work ..
and i am trying not to write a usual …
but then i just did
but this had a different take ..anyways …
batteed bodies , shattered souls ..
excellent line !!!!!!
rustyneurons said
this was wonderfulllllllll !!!!
I am amazed at the way you spin these words, tumble them and finally frame them to mean a lovely poem – this one was profound..
rustyneurons said