Its time.


Race, Color, Religion, and Gender
You name it, and we discriminated.
My race is great, said some
Your religion is inferior, said other
Male is more capable, claimed some
Your color makes you unfit, blurted others.

The variety amongst us, a reason to enjoy,
Colors of nature, a real bundle of joy.
With cruel intentions and selfish interests,
Misusing the power, creating a rift,
Divide and they did rule,
Making fools of themselves and people too.

World saw the raising, of some real gems,
Gandhi, Mandela and the great Martin Luther King,
Trying to spread the knowledge, the idea,
The concept of equality,
The fact, that we are all humans.
They struggled, they fought, and they won,
Thousands of hearts, and thousands of souls

The job not fully done,
Acts of discriminations still around,
People still being ill treated,
People still suffering due to discrimination.
Now is not the time, for us to give up,
It is time for all of us to rise,
Rise against discrimination.


The topic over at writer’s island is “Rising”. Here’s my attempt.





22 responses »

  1. Starting with…?

    Starting with anything and everything we can do to stop this, I guess the biggest problem is the mindset here, which makes it all the more difficult to change. So why not start with ourselves, get rid of hyprocracies and prejudices we have in ourself related to gender/caste/color/race etc.

  2. This is without a doubt the worst poem I’ve read on any blog (but I confess, I’ve only seen several, not hundreds). I mean worst composition, not content. Notice, Rambler, that Crafty Green said, “great message!” Not great style, great construction, great metaphor. Yeah, discrimnation can be a bad thing, applied to people without reason, or based on the immutables of race, gender, handicap, etc. But it appears the blogosphere could use an increase in discriminating tastes, standards, etc. For here I’ve never seen so much mediocrity spread around, posing as real thought, real poetry, real prose, etc. And all I see in the various comments are ‘nice job’ etc. No real constructive criticism. You’re all just patting each other on the back. You’re not learning from each other, because you haven’t bothered to learn from your ancestors or the geniuses and real artists and poets from the past. Most of what I see on blogs is folks sharing their ignorance with one another. It appears to me that this e-generation would be much better served cracking open a book that was written one, two, or three hundred years ago, than on spending its time on (entertaining but useless) blogging.
    How is this for an unsolicited sermon!
    I couldn’t keep it in any longer.
    Don’t take this personal. Most blogs are like as I’ve described. Yours is just unlucky to have been under my keyboard when the last straw overwhelmed my camel’s back, straws of impatience over young people who have the legacy of the world at their fingertips (they’re not Lincolns walking miles to a library, and reading by candlelight or light thrown on the hearth) yet they choose to wallow together in mediocrity, and pretend it’s ‘intellectual pursuit’. It’s like the whole lot of you are in a swamp, eating mud and calling it good, but you’re afraid to look up the slopes and see the hillsides covered with orchards, and fruit, ripe for the picking.

    Firstly I welcome you to virtual ramblings and thanks for a honest take on the poem. I guess you, or anybody else as well is entitled to provide a honest opinion, even if it is criticizing the author’s work. And I also believe that there is a long way for many of us to go before we reach the levels of some of the great authors from the past. This does not mean we should not try, does it?
    Regarding constructive criticism, It would have been wonderful if you could have given some more insights as to why you thought the composition was bad, or what about style of the poem you did not like.
    Regarding the blog land and people patting each other’s back, I think there are different ways people communicate the information, so what if one pats the other’s back and also provides a hint as to what can be improved?..
    One thing I don’t agree with you is that, “you guys are not learning from each other”, I have learnt a lot from fellow bloggers..
    No I haven’t taken this personal, don’t worry.. one more thing is poetry like any other art is subjective, so many be some of us have different likes than you.

  3. Rambler, ignore that idiot. This poem rocks simply because it drives home your message so clearly. There are people who will read this and STILL not get it, sad to say. Who’ll tell you that Mandela, Ghandi, and ML King weren’t the bastions of virtue we portray them to be.

    And that’s fine. Part of your message is that we’re all entitled to our opinions. I happen to agree 100% and then some with you — that holding each other back (like this idiot in your comments) is one of the worst things we can do. We should be helping lift each other higher.

    Imagine how far we could climb if we did.

    Keep up the good fight. It takes one person to start a revolution, a wise rabbi once said. And then another. And then another.

    Keep reminding yourself of that.

    I agree with you that together we need to lift each other higher, some of us believe in encouragement to reach there, some others might prefer criticism.

  4. This has great message. Still we do not learn. I think we Indians are one of the most discriminating of all.

    And like Susan says, ignore that hateful comment.

    Gautami, Hmm I really don’t agree with Indians being one of the most discriminant :)..

  5. For sure, the message is valid and your words ring true. A prime example of discrimination and righteousness is the comment from an anonymous (albeit named) reader. Keep up the good fight, as SHG said.

    Tumblewords. As long as the message is recieved,I think the purpose of the poem was achieved 🙂

  6. wow how apropos doncha think… nothing happens by chance… and the clarity of your words sing out loud and clear… shall i repeat as others..keep up the good fight!!!… amen

    Thanks LittleWing

  7. Discrimination is part of all our make-up. Yours, mine, everybodies. Even dare I say Docgrubb whoever he or she may be. It’s how it’s used that matters.

    Keith, why should we accept that to be a part of us?..

  8. SHG -do you think Ghandi called people who disagreed w/ him (or criticized him) “idiots”? 2. These men had virtues, but what do you mean by you “portray them to be”? “Portray” has a connotation beyond what you’re trying to say. And what rabbi said it only takes one person to start a revolution? It also only takes one to start a forest fire, or an epidemic, or a crowded space panic, etc.
    T-words: do you mean “self-righteousness”? And how can something be both named AND anonymous? “Docgrubb” is certainly closer to my name than “Tumblewords” is to yours, I daresay, and my web-whereabouts shouldn’t be too difficult to figure out.
    The comments only serve to prove my thesis: that you all (and by that I mean most bloggers) need to get into some books and some study, and OUT of each other’s morass of unprofitable words and illogical thoughts. Quit “pooling you ignorance”.

  9. Docgrubb:

    FWIW you are right about the general mediocrity of the blogosphere and its contents. But I ask you if it is all that different from how the world is.

    Giving feedback – unsolicited – in the blogosphere, especially if one is brave enough to write with one’s own name, and not pseudonymously, is tricky business. The feedback-giver has to rely on the web persona of the pseudonymous writer and then hope as hell not to get brickbats or hate mail. How do I know? I have been naive enough to give feedback and I use my real name.

    Giving feedback on creative endeavours is trickier still. It is like telling the parent of a baby that the baby is ugly and you know just the right sort of plastic surgeon who could help with that ugly nose or chinless jawline. How would you expect the feedback to be received?

    That said, don’t you think you are guilty of doing exactly what you are accusing Rambler’s readers of? You did not give him any feedback either.

    I am not trying to start a flame-war here; I have enough experience from Web 1.0 to know that it only goes so far before someone invokes Hitler! That said, I can understand why you may not want to give feedback. Reforming the whole world can be an ideal but not a real world job, can it?

    Just my thoughts. You are welcome to consider them or not (noting in all fairness that I have not defended or attacked Rambler or his readers). I do not attempt to write poetry, I write factual stuff; so I feel not particularly well-placed to critique others’ efforts. I took his intended message on board and posed him a real world question as my ‘comment’.

    I guess we are not correct in judging ” general mediocrity of the blogosphere and its contents”, its again subjective, how do we make sure our assessment is right?. I mean I might find a piece X wrote amazing, and same might sound stupid to someone else. Isn’t this same with books, films and many other things.
    I personally do not find blogosphere mediocre, so what the language is not as good as some great book, so what is poetry is not as good as great poets, what I love about blogs is the personal touch it has, and the emotions attached to that. I do not get that feeling when I read an excellant book.

  10. Very inspirational poem Rambler.. I saw that idiot visiting you he probably doesn’t understand your words. I missed reading you this week. Had to do a lot of overtime at work. have a nice day,

    Thanks Marja,

  11. as i read thru this i could not help but wonder,, where is the great man in this moment in history?? i guess we could classify the dahli lama,, but he is a strictly religious figure as well…

    your closing words,, and the seeming absence of men fighting to make a difference makes me wonder if now is not the time,,, when???

    The great man of the moment is You, its me, its one and all of us, why do we need to depend on one/few great men, when we can do our bit, now is not the time to give up, its the time to sit up and fight thats what I meant 🙂

  12. shefaly-
    yours are wise words, and ones that can be responded to, in reason.
    Yes, i’m no poetry critic. and i’m not a food critic either, but i can tell when a steak is too tough, or the soup too salty. And i must say, that in just one week of skimming the blogosphere, i haven’t read one poem that has been worth the calories of the typist or the retinoids consumed in readers’ eyes. almost uniformly garbage (again, I mean the FORM, not the substance). and the prose and opinions haven’t been much better, including substance. It shows that logic is no longer taught in public schools (or that MSG, aspartame, and TV have damaged a generation’s collective brain.)
    you’re right, as I confessed, my input was unsolicited. and i’m sorry for intruding. but this is a semi-public venue, after all.
    that said, i think i’ll forsake blogdom, and return to my books. i invite all of you to the local library – it’s free, and there’s space to chill and read. just stay away from the ‘puter terminal, the magazines, the coffee table books.
    may i indulge in one last arrogance, and suggest a few books:
    Goodbye, Mr. Chips
    Les Miserables, Hugo
    The Idiot, Dostoevsky
    84, Charing Cross Road, H.Hanff
    The Sunflower, Simon Wiesenthal
    there, that’s enough for starters.
    And Marja: I accept your apology.

    docgrubb, I do agree that this is a public venue and you are entitled to your opinion. I would be unhappy of one thing though, that my poem made you forsake the blogworld, there are amazing writers in the blog world, may be you did not come across them.

  13. Docgrubb:

    Thanks for your note.

    The only thing “arrogant” about your note, in my view, is your presumption that people do not read books just because they read or write blogs. The two activities are not mutually exclusive. I do both, as in my experience do many other bloggers. I am indeed familiar with the books you suggest (having read them, not just browsed their covers) and am more than intimately familiar with Charing Cross Road’s legacy although shops such as depicted in 84 Charing Cross now do not exist (crossing over from the realm of fiction to fact, as is my wont).

    My point above was merely about the art of critiquing. If I am critiquing something, I need to have a basis for it. This is why I do not critique dress designers or poets or chefs; whether the steak is too salty is a criticism, not a critique. And in itself it is specific enough whereas telling an aspiring poet (however bad his attempts) that his work is crap is neither criticism nor critique.

    Do enjoy your time in the library! 🙂 My favourite in London is the British Library. And at home, I have a formidable library of sorts too.

  14. Rambler-
    I can tell from your responses that you are a very decent man. (I presume you’re a guy – why don’t all blogs have an ‘about author’ page?) Very possibly (only God knows the heart) a better one than I am.
    I’m just a mid-aged fellow, and not very techno savvy. Yeah, poetry is probably not your calling, but you must have strengths not so obvious in this two-dimensional format of written language. I just get frustrated that, as the world “progresses” (it’s not, really) and the abillty and sophistication of communication advances by leaps and bounds, the IDEAS, THOUGHT, FORM, and BEAUTY mankind is producing become less and less worthy of promulgation. In other words, the easier it gets to disseminate info, the less the info ought be disseminated. My 15 y/o son lies on his bed at bedtime and watches “Family Guy” or other on his iPod. He’s not learning a d**n thing. At his age I took a book, fiction or nonfiction, and learned more than I did at school. Sometimes technology, like affluence, is a curse.
    Yet…you ought not be the recipient of MY frustration.
    My apologies (and advice!) stand.
    all the best,

  15. Rambler:

    “..” general mediocrity of the blogosphere and its contents”,..”

    It depends on what part of the blogosphere you trawl 🙂

    My greater interest – with some exceptions such as your blog – is in issues such as business/ technology/ politics/ entrepreneurship where it is easier to separate the mediocrity of an argument from the relative superiority of another. Some reasonable people – whose reasonableness I did not deduce from their blogging but from knowing or having worked with them in my many years in life – admit that in their experience, the lighter the substance, the more popular the blog! So this opinion on mediocrity is not just mine, some (objectively as well as popularly) very fine commentators appear to agree with it but they play the blogging game for one reason or another anyway. And not all reasons are articulated or articulated in blunt or honest terms that may piss more people off then it inspires.

    Anyway enough rationality. I prefer fact-based opinions, not idle ones. Perhaps that is where the rational-emotional cleavage is most evident.

    Actually your brought up a topic I wanted to ask you about from a long time.. I am really surprised that you read my blog.. mainly because its so much different than the one you write and that of many people who comment on your blog.
    I really don’t think one should worry about popularity or substance or link the two..
    Yep thats what I meant you seem to appear to be more
    Rational emotional cleavage.. wow you coined a great word.. so does it mean all subjective opinions are idle?.. they are not factual isn;t it 🙂

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